IELTS-Writing Exercises: Tak2:Aging society

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### Q:In many countries, the proportion of older people is steadily increasing. Does this trend have positive or negative effects on society? ###

### E1: People’s life expectancy keeps increasing due to development of science and technology and the growth of wealth. ###

### A1: People’s life expectancy has increased in many societies, possibly because of improvements in technology and the increase in personal wealth. ###

### E2: Although old people can contribute to the society, the demographic change may lead to many problems. ###

### A2: Although senior citizens can contribute extraordinarily to society, I would argue that demographic change can bring about many problems. ###

### E3: A problem related to aging is the abrupt growth of medical fee, which will give more burden to taxpayers. ###

### A3: One problem associated with an ageing population is that health care costs will escalate, imposing a burden on taxpayers. ###

### E4: As is known to us all, most of medical demand and cost occurs in the last years of life. ###

### A4: It is widely known that most medical needs and costs occur in the last years of life. ###

### E5: Therefore, the government needs to spend more on caring for elderly people, while some other key services, such as education, will suffer from lack of finance. ###

### A5: Governments have to pour more money in caring for the elderly, but other essential services like education will be underfunded. ###

### E6: With the number of older workers increasing, the slow work pace may be another problem. ###

### A6: The slow pace of work is another problem, as the number of senior works increases. ###

### E7: As age increases, people’s abilities to absorb information and deal with work tend to decline. ###

### A7: The ability to absorb information and complete work declines with age. ###

### E8: If the elderly put off retiring, they may influence the efficiency and interest of their companies. ###

### A8: If senior workers delay retirement, they may not perform as well as younger employees and this can influence companies’ productivity and profitability. ###

### E9: On the other hand, many people will put off retirement and extend their career lives, while their experience and wisdom are valuable society wealth. ###

### A9: On the other hand, many people will postpone retirement and extend their working life, and it is true their experience and wisdom are a valuable asset to the whole society. ###

### E10: Since people pay much attention to diet health and sports currently, they tend to live healthier and longer. ###

### A10: People today can live healthier and longer, since they pay closer attention to healthy eating and sports. ###

### E11: They can work as counsellor to pass their knowledge and skills to young ones. ###

### A11:They can work as consultants and impart their knowledge and skills to the younger generation. ###

### E12: For example, some experienced managers will teach young people how to run a company and how to serve the clients better. ###

### A12:For example, some senior managers can teach young people how to manage a company, and how to provide better services for clients. ###

### E13: All in all, the abrupt extension of life has pressed medical organizations in many countries, which also influence the output of labour. ###

### A13: In conclusion, the considerable extension of life expectancy has put strain on health care and made the workforce less productive. ###

### E14: This will influence the financial development although we can make full use of the wisdom of old people. ###

### A14: It will influence the economic development of a country, although we can make good use of senior workers’ wisdom. ###

# MODEL ESSAY #

People’s **life expectancy** has increased in many societies, possibly because of improvements in technology and the increase in **personal wealth**. Although senior citizens can **contribute extraordinarily to** society, I would argue that this **demographic change** can bring about some problems.

One problem associated with **an ageing population** is that **health care costs** will escalate ***increase***, **imposing a burden on** taxpayers. It is widely known that most **medical needs** and costs occur in **the last years of life**. ***That means that*** Governments have to pour more money in caring for the elderly, and in medical services. ***This is normally achieved by requiring working people to pay higher to pay higher income tax and cutting funds for other essential services like education.*** but other essential services like education will be underfunded.

The **slow pace of work** is another problem, as the number of **senior works** increases. The ability to **absorb information** and **complete work** declines with age. ***Many elderly people have a conservative attitude towards technology and struggle to learn how to use hi-tech devices and the latest software work.*** If ***they choose to*** senior workers delay retirement, their presence in the workforce they may not perform as well as younger employees and this can influence companies’ productivity ***and profitability and endanger the whole economy.***

On the other hand, ***the experience and wisdom of senior citizens can be*** many people will postpone retirement and extend their working life, and it is true their experience and wisdom are a **valuable asset** to the whole society. People today can live healthier and longer lives, as since they pay closer attention to **healthy eating** and sports. They can work as consultants ***even after leaving the workforce***, and **impart their knowledge and skills** to the younger generation. For example, some senior managers can teach young people how to manage a company, and how to provide better services for clients. ***Our society can draw upon the expertise of these older people.***  
In conclusion, the considerable extension of life expectancy has put strain on health care and made the workforce less productive. It will influence the economic development of a country, although we can make good use of senior workers’ wisdom.

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